John "Omega" Williams
Cant download or copy-aste text examples so so here just a quick glance over and something spotted.
Page 3: Formatting error. Probably irrelevant to the final form but on the off chance its relevant.
Atsuna Period ended. The atsuna Clan now with-
a ruler of age and in dismay take home in
Page 4 is blank
Typo page 5 Wafuto entry,
militaryexpertise and ruthlessness and another in the next paragraph.
Atsua entry: might want to replace gamer with player.
The Other Clans entry. Typo at the bottom.
These are show in yellow,
Page 7: A visual observation. The font on the example card. The "o"
looks like an "a" and at first glance read Silver Fax Shrine. And the "B" looks like a "G", so at a glance read Ganus and so on.
Might want to consider a different font.
Page 9: The wording on capturing a shrine is a little odd on the rules for capturing enemy shrines. Seems to read that either you cannot claim a shrine until it is neutral. Or it reads that you cannot gain the benefit until 2 turns have passed?
Page 10: You switch between using the term token and coin. Might want to stick to one or the other to lessen confusion as it can read as if there is both.
That was it. The combat section seems a fraction verbose/redundant. But otherwise was fine as was.