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Hi.

If you have time and like proofing rules please check this 2 page rule book for my upcoming game Friends & Influence. The rules have been proofed once already but a few small changes have been made. Fresh eyes are always welcome.

Here is the google drive link - PLEASE COMMENT ON THE DOCUMENT - The rules are here on google drive. https://docs.google.com/document/d/1E_-2IBb6pUApemUiLhWsfAQu... Thank you.

The game's WIP thread is here: https://boardgamegeek.com/thread/1374491/wip-pnp-friends-and...

 
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Thanks Joel for taking a look. If you don't mind, I have added you to the credits. If you have any more suggestions, that would be great.
 
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ex1st wrote:
Thanks Joel for taking a look. If you don't mind, I have added you to the credits. If you have any more suggestions, that would be great.


No problem, you're welcome. I've been through the document in more detail this afternoon, hope it's of some use.
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Thanks to Vincent van Doorn and Graham Allen for their help.
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ex1st wrote:
Thanks Joel for taking a look. If you don't mind, I have added you to the credits. If you have any more suggestions, that would be great.


No problem, you're welcome. I've been through the document in more detail this afternoon, hope it's of some use.

Most certainly. Yes. A big help, thank you. I will be adding your names on the cards.
 
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If you decide to edit the rules, please post here your name so I can tip you when I earn some more gold.
 
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The process continues,
the rules are being refined,
and your help is always wanted!

COMMENT ON THE RULES via google drive
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1dVJ_nALT9gL-ymBNVQLT7_Zp...

GET THE PDF with all the rules on just one A4 page (single side)
http://www.ex1st.com/games/friendsandinfluence/friendsandinf...

Thanks again.
 
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Hey Charles,

I left some comments on your rules document. Overall the game sounds very interesting. The structure of the rules document needs some work. You start out well.

Overview
Components
Setup

But something breaks down after that. The New Round section appearing at the end of the Turn Summary is confusing.

I'm watching the video play through now to get a better sense of how the game is played.

Also, I think the citation of "It's a 20 minute game of diplomacy." giving credit to whoever said it is unnecessary and looks strange. It makes it appear as if it's a quote from a famous author.
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Hey Charles,

I added some comments to the current draft of the rulebook.

Brendan
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wombat929 wrote:
Hey Charles,

I added some comments to the current draft of the rulebook.

Brendan


Hi Brendan, thank you for such an extensive review of RULES 7.

You suggestions have been incorporated into RULES 9 - which was set aside for the translator to work with without any of our comments interfering. I have now made a copy (RULES 10) and provide that to her.

Here is a link to RULES 9, I will continue working on this document.

COMMENT ON THE RULES via google drive:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/12z5mxGZMtUKiMhPaWVFu7UG8...

Thanks you. Not only did you provide proofing skills but also good ideas to improve the game (making it more elegant). Awesome.
 
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Glad to help! I'll take a look at the updated doc when you post it.
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wombat929 wrote:
Glad to help! I'll take a look at the updated doc when you post it.


Great, its the link above in BOLD. Thanks.
 
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ex1st wrote:
wombat929 wrote:
Glad to help! I'll take a look at the updated doc when you post it.


Great, its the link above in BOLD. Thanks.


Updated for commenting.
 
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For those interested in the role cards, please visit the WIP thread for a sneak peak: https://boardgamegeek.com/article/20000870#20000870
 
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I like the changes. Posted a few more thoughts.
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The Rules, Role Cards and Favors have been revised.
Please message me if you want to look through everything.
 
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wombat929 wrote:
I like the changes. Posted a few more thoughts.


Thanks again for the proofing.
 
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This weekend I visited the Rules translator for this game. We were both quite happy with the rules. As expected she found some shortcoming but they have since been resolved. Thanks to everyone involved, the latest rules are RULES 11: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1OsZO5fxsUEzS7Fs4h1DXoz8M... Feel free to comment, there is still time.
 
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It's coming together nicely.

One thing that really jumped out at me was the amount of bold and CAPS being scattered around the text. I get that you are trying to emphasise key concepts, but to me it just breaks up the flow of the rules.
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polyobsessive wrote:
It's coming together nicely.

One thing that really jumped out at me was the amount of bold and CAPS being scattered around the text. I get that you are trying to emphasise key concepts, but to me it just breaks up the flow of the rules.

I agree. And try to be consistent, I see some words capitalized, some bold and some both.
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Just an update on Friends & Influence, now called Blood & Fortune.
We just got our facebook page up and running.
Thanks for checking it out.
https://www.facebook.com/bloodandfortune/
 
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