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Michael Knight
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Okay need help here and figured this was the best place to seek it out. If anyone has a moment can you read over the rule book for our game and give some feed back? Please ignore any spelling or grammatical errors as these are noted and being fixed. What we need to know is if it explains things clearly, repeats to much in places or flows correctly and is not disjointed. WE were in the process of having it corrected when the person doing so make comments that made us step back and wonder if it was a good rule book or not. So if you hvae time it is about 24 pages with 9 of those being a glossary so you can ignore that part. Just need the first half reviewed.

https://www.dropbox.com/s/gebq0isf0pomyq0/Freedom%20Squadron...
 
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Rob Harper
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Hi Michael.

I've had a look through the first few pages and started to make some notes. I should be able to finish the job this evening, and will send you my comments as soon as I can. I'm probably making more grammatical comments than you would like, but you can always ignore them.
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Funny you mention that! Our editor put up the correct version last night, she got done faster than thought. I updated the link with the corrected grammar, spelling and punctuation wise version.

We will however take all advice and corrections!
 
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Cool. I've got the updated rulebook and am checking through my previous comments to see what still applies.

Slightly disappointed that you got rid of "players rotate clockwise", which sounded like a lit of fun.
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I've sent you some notes by GeekMail. Hope they are of some help.

Good luck with the game. It looks like fun.
 
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WE thought about leaving that in, but many players complained about having to keep moving seats during the game. laugh


Also we got the message and wanted to thank you for the help!
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