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Subject: Help me with wording - band of werewolves rss

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Is this correct? Can it be written better? The card's supposed to attack players clockwise, until someone kills it or draws.

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Looks good to me.
 
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Since you asked for help, I won't shy away from perhaps sounding too critical

You have a typo on 'Bloodthirsty' also don't feel it's necessary to capitalize 'Monsters' here as you are speaking descriptively instead of referring to the specific enemy type and it's not the name of the card. You could also use a synonym like 'beasts' here. The rest is a matter of rewording so it flows and sounds better. I would rewrite it as follows if it were me:

Bloodthirsty monsters are on the hunt. If you are defeated, move the Night Hunters to the next character's playing space to your left in addition to losing 1 life. The Night Hunters will then attack that character.
 
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Why not the next closest character, rather than a meta concept like who is next in turn order?
 
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Calinor wrote:
Why not the next closest character, rather than a meta concept like who is next in turn order?

It's quicker than counting spaces to determine distance.
You don't have to worry about ties for distance.
And you don't need extra confusing wording to say "doesn't attack anyone who has already been attacked, unless everyone has already been attacked" to prevent it from just bouncing between two people.
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